A friend is trying to reduce living expenses. This person is trying to decide among the following three ways to do this:
-Find a roommate (housemate) who can share living expenses
-Buy new technology products such as the latest mobile (cell phone),
-Buy less expensive foods to cook at home (instead of eating in restaurants or buying expensive food items)
Which of these would you recommend to your friend for reducing living expenses? Why?
There is no shortage of debate about how people can reduce their living expenses. Many believe they can reduce their life expenses buy cooking food at home or do not buy latest technology devices, while other believe find a roommate to share living cost is a best way to reduce living cost. I am of the opinion that second idea is better. Thus, I would suggest my friend to find a roommate to share the rent. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this is good idea in the following.
To begin with, I believe my friend can reduce his life expenses by share his room. Because paying rent in due time is very hard for him, it is because his annual salary is not to much. In order to be close to his working place, he rent a home in expensive place. Thus, he pay half of his salary for his room. He can find another person to defray his cost. Not only that, but also new technology products such as cellphone or laptop is not too expensive. These products do not cost more than 3000 dollar, Also, eating food at home is not very cheaper than resturant, because these companies charge their customer only 10 percent more, and this is not make big different to make food in his house. For instance, Last year, I moved to new city far from my parents home. At the beginning I did not share my room, because I wanted privacy. But after two months I notice it is really expensive to pay the whole rent, hence, I decided to share my room with other guy. It was a good decision because I save more than half of my part-time job salary.
Moreover, individuals can use other people experience. Sharing room with others, provide this opportunity to my friend to use his roommate experience. My own experience is a good example of this. When I was university student, I lived in campus. My roommate was secondary student in my major field, Thus, he gave me very important advice about professor and about classes. Not only that, but I used his assist to complete my assignment. Similarly, because my friend is student now, he can use this benefit if he share his room with other student.
In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe sharing house rent whit other person is better way to reduce living expenses. This is because paying rent is monthly and it is more expensive than the other, and because it provide opportunity to my friend to improve his social skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Many believe they can reduce their life expenses buy cooking food at home or do ...
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Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'buy the latest'.
Suggestion: buy the latest
...nses buy cooking food at home or do not buy latest technology devices, while other believe...
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Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
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Suggestion: the
...find a roommate to share living cost is a best way to reduce living cost. I am of...
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Suggestion:
...nion that second idea is better. Thus, I would suggest my friend to find a roomma...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...life expenses by share his room. Because paying rent in due time is very hard for...
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... it is because his annual salary is not to much. In order to be close to his worki...
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Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...ese products do not cost more than 3000 dollar, Also, eating food at home is not very ...
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Line 5, column 513, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'shares'.
Suggestion: shares
...dent now, he can use this benefit if he share his room with other student. In conc...
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Line 7, column 248, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...xpensive than the other, and because it provide opportunity to my friend to improve his...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, really, second, similarly, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49202733485 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4097385625 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478359908884 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3971011295 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.88 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.56 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230468367636 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690288236377 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663932634592 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17232018703 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879597537637 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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