In future students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying traditional schools Which would you prefer Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice

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In future students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.

Though technical innovation and pervasiveness may frutiful in the many aspects of the life, it is not necessarily beneficial in the teaching program at all the time. In my opinion, I believe, learning through the online class is favourable for the people for their time management, but have relative demerits for several reason. Thus, I point out my preference of traditional education to the technical education in my subsequent paragraphs.

Studying with technology aspects alone may hamper the education quality of the student. For maintaining good education environment, there is requirement to follow the classroom discipline which definitely lack in the virtual class. In this condition, teacher may not give the attention for the student as does in the real classroom; as a result, student can do anything they want or easily out of the focus from the study. Despite comfortable method to educate, there is high possibility that this education system fails to meet the purpose of enlighting individual.

Another biggest drawback of the technological education is to make the student socially awkward. Contrary to the classroom setting, there is less interaction of the student among themselves; student may not talk eachother or communicate among themselves except in the teaching hours. While in the traditional class room, they can interact or know about eachother in the free time which make them socially confident. That's why we became friends with our classroom pal and rarely be with the online partners. As we always live in the society, we should use to with social manner, and the traditional makes the foundation for it.

To sum up, to be good scholar and competitive person in the world job market, we should learn the academic skills as well as interpersonal skills. As the traditional education not only help to develop good skills in an individual but also a good interpersonal skills, it's importance remains inspite of the technological dominant system.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: several reasons
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...ndividual but also a good interpersonal skills, its importance remains inspite of the ...
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...the technological dominant system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, well, while, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28075709779 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98106420976 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570977917981 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5697313633 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.571428571 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133341672368 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464038675488 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397610590546 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717155121781 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287601305155 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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