getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting that from your peers.
Friends have a prominent role in our lives. They often help us effectively in various conditions. Due to the paramount importance role of friends in our decisions, a heated debate exists over whether which category of them can be more useful. Some people believe that those friends who have the same age present more valuable advice than the others who are older. some others, including me, have an opposite viewpoint. I firmly believe that we can get more useful guidance from older friends. In what follows, I will elaborate the most outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, older people have remarkable experiences. Using their advice effectively paves the way for us to be aware of different unfamiliar aspects of the circumstances. There is no doubt that, this standpoint helps us to have a comprehensive understanding of probable consequences of any decision. For instance, when I was a mechanical engineering student I had a friend who had graduated two years earlier. Once the department asked the students to choose the subject of the final projects, I immediately referred to him. He had been working on composite materials for three years before the graduation. Although he deals with business activities now, he gave me invaluable information about the challenges of working with such special kind of material. I was useful for me since I repudiated to select this field for final thesis. Had I chosen the composite materials at that time, I would have confronted with serious problems especially on producing valid results with respect to limited experimental facilities.
A furthermore significant point is that peers often are considered as the main rivals for students. They may have common goals. therefore, it is indispensable that a hidden competition exists among the students in the same age. Nobody can ignore the sense of competition among the peers. Consequently, it is likely that their advice has a misleading role instead of being helpful. Let's consider my friend's experience as an example to clarify this point. My friend was a member of a soccer team when he was a high school student. He has always been eager to detect the shortcut ways to ace the game efficiently. This goal was very important for him since the mentor had just one selection for the forward player in the final team. One of the other students who had the same goal tried to give incorrect information about the effective methods for having the perfect performance during the match. As a result, my poor friend lost the golden opportunity with his misleading advice. That is why getting advice from the older people is a better choice to guarantee the success.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementioned reasons, it seems that people who are older give use more valuable advice. Not only do they have a lot of invaluable experiences, but also older people often have not strong competition with us. Hence, it is highly recommended to notice the guidance presented by older people rather than peers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in brief, kind of, no doubt, as a result, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.046 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84564157968 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.693982039 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3870967742 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1290322581 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.74193548387 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211056920496 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506004939628 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815842611147 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14525242132 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867123070048 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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