government has done enough to educate people about the importance of healthy lifestyles
Currently, society has witnessed an unprecedented accumulation of material affluence, therefore the authority is putting more emphasis on citizens’ health rather than the advancement of the economy. Meanwhile, the expanding middle class developing on the basis of the sizzling economy reckon that what the government has done is not enough to educate people about the significance of a balanced lifestyle and health. However, I cannot concur with this idea and my view can be substantiated as follows.
To start with, the regime has already taken measures to help city dwellers to build up their health. Living in a society full of fierce competition, a myriad of individuals, especially the white-collar, have to live sedentary lives. Based on unhealthy lifestyles, some diseases, both chronic and acute, are triggered, which enslaves numerous citizens. Under this situation, the government is also aware of serious health conditions, hence it allocates lots of funds to construct basic infrastructures, such as gyms allowing citizens to work out for free, parks providing citizens a break from the concrete jungles and things like that. With the authority’s efforts, this kind of infrastructure has been proliferated in every city, not only the metropolis but also small and petite towns. Here is a case in the point. My father is an eminent architecture and he used to stay up late into night to draw drafts and erect models, which exerted detrimental effects on his physical fitness. Worse still, he did not have sufficient leisure time to do some exercises owing to the dearth of gyms adjacent to our house. However, after the government’s firm measures have been taken, a new playground was built, which benefits all residents in the community. Since then, whenever my father finishes his work, he can walk there to run around so as to improve his health.
What’s more, residents’ awareness of health has also been elevated by the government’s relentless endeavors. To be more specific, it is useless to only erect infrastructure used for exercising, thus the regime has implemented some assisted but efficacious methods to stimulate people to have regular exercises. Initially, the government launched a campaign to call for whole citizens to work out regularly to elongate our lifespans and reinforce our health. Tremendous individuals, incentivized by the call-for, initiated to go out of their home to do some sports. Additionally, varieties of activities were also operated by the government. For instance, when I was in high school, on certain days, there were some officers from the Bureau of the health and medicine coming to our school to send hundreds of fleets to propagate the dominant importance of healthy lifestyles. Reading the knowledge printed on the fleets rendered me to alter bad habits that were detrimental to my fitness and encouraged me to switch to a healthier way.
Admittedly, with the development of technology and civilization, the government has to keep pace with the advancement to propagate the ever-changing healthier lifestyles. Nevertheless, with regard to past endeavors, the measures taken by the authority do the trick in educating citizens.
In a nutshell, I would like to reiterate my opinion that what the regime has done is enough to educate people about the significance of healthy lifestyles because, for one thing, the regime has built numerous infrastructures. For the other, it also sparks city dwellers to attach more attention to the health and instills knowledge related to healthy lifestyles to them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1340, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s work, he can walk there to run around so as to improve his health. What's more, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, kind of, such as, for one thing, to start with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 96.0 52.1666666667 184% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3026.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33686067019 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19444417058 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 212.727598566 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 966.6 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2018775635 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.083333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29166666667 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199757528206 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470729228276 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933346110836 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1340890966 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104643540849 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 86.8835125448 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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