The government has enough money to fund one of the following choices to
improve younger children’s education. Which do you think is most effective?
1. hire more teachers so that each class has fewer students
2. Let children age 3-4 to go to preschool before elementary school
3. Teachers learn the new method for teaching children
Some people think that the government should hire more teachers to improve young people’s education if the government has enough money. Others maintain that the government must let children to go to preschool to improve young students’ education. Still others claim that learning new methods for tutoring children is better. For me, I believe that hiring more teachers so that each class has fewer pupils is the best option to improve education. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, in order to enhance education quality, governments must ensure that students are concentrating on their class. Apparently, hiring more teachers can help pupils become attentive in class. For instance, the Taichung City government helped my niece’s school to hire 10 more elementary lecturers. Therefore, there were merely 15 students each class in her school. In other words, each elementary school instructor only needed to focus on these 15 pupils, which means that teacher could make sure everyone is attentive during the class. On the other hand, a class with no less than 50 children makes a lecturer impossible to check that everybody is concentrating. So evidently, hiring more teachers help reduce the number of people per class, and this help students concentrate more.
In addition, in order to boost the quality of young peoples’ education, the government must have enough money. Yet, the government might waste too much money on preschool education. For instance, the Taipei City government allocated 100 million dollars per year funding construction company to construct pre-elementary schools. To be more specific, the government spent lots of money sponsoring lands and building schools for preschool education. As a result, approximately 20% of the total budgets were spend on funding preschool education. On the contrary, the Kaohsiung City government disbursed only 40 million dollars for hiring more elementary school lecturers. Clearly, hiring teachers help the government save a great deal of budgets.
Last but not least, a well-designed education means students can acquire knowledge from the system, and hiring more teacher can definitely help students gain more knowledge. For instance, the Kaohsiung City government helped my brother’s elementary school hire several experienced and well-educated English teachers. These teachers educated students on how to memorize English vocabulary using mnemonic phrases. As a result, my brother remembered more than a million new vocabulary within less than a year. On the other hand, the Hualien County government required all middle school math teachers to learn Python programming. Nevertheless, even though these math teachers were trained for four months, they only know a little compared to professional computer teachers. Consequently, students usually have problems understanding Python taught by math teachers.
In conclusion, I maintain that hiring more educators is the most ideal method to enhance young students’ education because the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2605.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63852813853 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9117317237 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1238766478 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4814814815 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1111111111 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2962962963 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343111154088 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985275654999 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657947870642 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209773239925 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896903000776 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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