The government has enough money to fund one of the following choices to
improve younger children’s education. Which do you think is most effective?
1. hire more teachers so that each class has fewer students
2. Let children age 3-4 to go to preschool before elementary school
3. Teachers learn the new method for teaching children
Some people think that the government should hire more teachers to improve young people’s education if the government has enough money. Others maintain that the government must let children to go to preschool to improve young students’ education. Still others claim that learning new methods for tutoring children is better. For me, I believe that hiring more teachers so that each class has fewer pupils is the best option to improve education. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, in order to enhance education quality, governments must ensure that students are concentrating on their learning. Apparently, hiring more teachers help pupils become attentive in class. For instance, the Taichung City government helped my niece’s school to hire 10 more elementary educators. Therefore, there were merely 15 students in each class. In other words, each instructor only needed to focus on15 pupils. As a result, my niece was always focusing on the blackboard because if he spaced out a little, he would be caught by his teacher instantly. On the other hand, a class with no less than 50 children made teachers impossible to check whether everybody is concentrating. Thus, for the sake of students’ attentiveness, the government should assist schools in reducing the number of teachers per classroom.
In addition, in order to boost the quality of young peoples’ education, the government must have enough money. Yet, the government might waste too much money on preschool education. For instance, the Taipei City government allocated 100 million dollars per year funding construction company to construct pre-elementary schools. To be more specific, the government purchased lands and provided infrastructure for construction companies to establish pre-elementary schools. As a result, approximately 20% of the total budget was spend on funding preschool education. On the contrary, the Kaohsiung City government disbursed only 40 million dollars for hiring more elementary school and middle school lecturers. Clearly, hiring teachers help the government save a great deal of budgets.
Last but not least, a well-designed education means students can acquire knowledge from the system, and hiring more teacher can definitely help students gain more knowledge. For instance, the Kaohsiung City government helped my brother’s elementary school hire several experienced and well-educated English teachers. These teachers educated students on how to memorize English vocabulary using mnemonic phrases. As a result, my brother remembered more than a million new vocabulary within less than a year. On the other hand, the Hualien County government required all middle school math teachers to learn and teach Python programming. Nevertheless, even though these math teachers were trained for four months, they only know a little compared to professional computer teachers. Consequently, students usually have problems understanding Python taught by math teachers.
In conclusion, I maintain that hiring more educators is the most ideal method to enhance young students’ education because the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 8.0752688172 372% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2683.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67230443975 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02272057238 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524312896406 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3037114312 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8214285714 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8928571429 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3181921539 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890314585174 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667769624317 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198255095554 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917111696924 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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