Government should not provide financial support to artists (For example, painters, writer, musicians …), and the government should let them support themselves.
With the rapid growth of the society, people have more choices to live a life they want. Some of them choose to become artists which cannot earn much money. Some people think that government should not provide financial support to artists. However, from my point of view, I think it is unreasonable to give out such a statement.
To begin with, many artists nowadays cannot by get much money from selling the artwork to support their family or even themselves. To be more specific, there are always some buskers playing music or painting on the graffitiing wall at the street corner. Many people cannot understand their art style and may think them like beggars and stragglers asking for money on the street. They cannot win respect from others and could only earn a little money. In other people’s eyes, they are just crazy and worthy for sympathy.
In addition, sometimes it takes artists a lot of time to sell out their artworks, during that time their life cannot be guaranteed and could only be supported by the government. For instance, there was once a senior in my school who studied art. After graduated from the university, she opened her own painting art studio with her in New York. Her artworks are really great in many professionals’ eyes, but cannot be understand by local citizens easily. Hence, not many people come to her shop to buy her artworks. She waits a lot of time, for about 3 months, but finally this piece of artwork was exhibited by an art museum. Thanks to the funding of the government, her life in these three months was guaranteed.
In a nutshell, based on the reasons that some are recognized by people as beggars who cannot win much respect from others and it takes a long time to sell out a wonderful artwork, I strongly agree that government should provide financial support to artists in order to guarantee their life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, however, if, may, really, so, for instance, i think, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48438627188 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8786924007 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1176470588 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165804672715 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05752859878 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990200692205 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130256952616 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734537513427 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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