government should spend more money to improve the athletics or art
Personally, I definitely think that government should expenses more money to improve the athletics and sports. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, athletics and sports creating a healthy habit to the community. Obviously, when my government supports the sports, the citizens will be encourage to do sports. Hence we will make a healthier society. For example, when my city made a swimming compatition and offered a big prize for the winner. All of people in my city were exited to enrole in this compatition, even those who dont know how to swim. As a result a lot of people in the city learned swimming and like it. People in the city would not learn swimming, if there is no compatition.
Second, unlike the art, you do not need to be talented so you can be a part of it. Therefore, people tend to attend and join to sports activities more than arts. For instance, my university, who sruggled so hard to oppen an art clube. The reason is because there was not enough student to regester.
To sum up, I firmly believe that the athetics must be more supported by the government. This is because it helps the society to gain a healthier lifestyle, and it attracts more people.s
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
... sports, the citizens will be encourage to do sports. Hence we will make a healthier ...
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Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...itizens will be encourage to do sports. Hence we will make a healthier society. For e...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ole in this compatition, even those who dont know how to swim. As a result a lot of ...
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Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to swim'.
Suggestion: to swim
...ult a lot of people in the city learned swimming and like it. People in the city would n...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to swim'.
Suggestion: to swim
... it. People in the city would not learn swimming, if there is no compatition. Second...
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Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'sport'.
Suggestion: sport
...fore, people tend to attend and join to sports activities more than arts. For instance...
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Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
... hard to oppen an art clube. The reason is because there was not enough student to regeste...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1028.0 1977.66487455 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 222.0 407.700716846 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63063063063 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65126732104 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608108108108 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 321.3 618.680645161 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.2580416038 48.9658058833 35% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.5333333333 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188703108604 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582337521676 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115404654325 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126017000919 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10358207868 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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