The government wants to fund the following to improve children’s education:
1. hire more teachers to teach in a small class
2. provide preschool education before kindergarten
3. To provide some training course s so that teachers can be more professional
There is no doubt that nowadays, education plays a key role for governments. Due to its paramount importance, no one can deny the direct and indirect effects of education on society. Even though, some people are inclined toward the opinion that it is a fruitful for government to invest in providing preschool education before kindergarten or hiring more teacher to teach in small class, some others may take an another viewpoint which states that governments should pay attention to training courses which are pragmatic for teaching proficiency. From my vantage point, the latter belief is true. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my compelling reasons to vindicate my perspective.
The first noteworthy reason regarding the issue is that teaching is a demanding skill for the majority of people. It obvious that nowadays, some people have a great background in their field but they cannot express their knowledge clearly in order to clarify another people. This issue spreads between some teachers and although they have high academic degrees in their fields, they cannot illustrate some materials in courses very well. It is axiomatic that governments can invest in providing some institutes in order to learn this people very well. To shed light on this reason, I would like to draw your attention to recent studies about educational systems in different countries. The studies with respect to educational system and results of this experiment underscore the fact that government should concentrate on holding training courses for teachers because Finland has the best educational systems among all countries and they enroll Finnish teachers in some classes which are related to training.
The second pivotal point that I want to delve into is that when we compare teacher's role in education to another determinants, all of them will loose their significance against teacher's role. So, it is axiomatic that build up teaching skills among teachers is prior than other options such as increasing quantity of them or provide preschool before kindergarten. Moreover, providing preschool and hiring more teachers is not an economical for governments because they need to pay salaries for teachers. For instance, many years ago in my country, government did not pay attention to teaching skills and always invest his money in hiring more teachers but it was inconclusive. Finally, recently course curriculum for teachers is changed and all of college students who want to be a teacher, should pass training courses so as to graduate from their institute and by virtue of this, educational system in my country changes dramatically. Thanks to the government's activity which was a case in point, I could daresay that providing training course is more sensible because had the government not invested in this way, students could not flourish.
To recapitulate the discussion of the all points mentioned above, I should state that government should invest in training courses. Not only is it more economical, but also the majority of teachers have not enough skills so as to illuminate course materials. It is hard to disguise the fact that teacher's role in anything but pale. All in all, it is recommended that government spend its money to establish more training courses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a viewpoint' or 'another viewpoint'.
Suggestion: a viewpoint; another viewpoint
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...s. It is hard to disguise the fact that teachers role in anything but pale. All in all, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, well, as to, for instance, no doubt, such as, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2762.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25095057034 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79970642308 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490494296578 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 839.7 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.594971434 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.523809524 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0476190476 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36897993021 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105614046572 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793707977146 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234261054758 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758518950028 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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