Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics (like state Olympics team).

Art and creativity are always together.People who love art have a very kind heart and they see beauy out of every simple thing which is helpful for having healthy environment. While some beleive government has to spend more money in support of athlets, others are against it. I think government has to spend more money in support of arts than athletes and my reasons go as follows.
First of all, art and beauty has roots in every body's mind.All the people in everywhere like beauty. Art is a tool to show the life and it's beaty to people in a creative ways.For example, an artist can see something in the nature that others did not notice. Art encourages people to see the world differently and it worth it. Most of the art works has something beyond their show and that meaning is eyeopening for others.
Moreover, by funding more to the arts, government will benefit more. For instance, more gallories and artworks and musiums bring more visitors to the country. Therefore, the goverment by increasing tourist attraction by art work would benefit. Also, government by funding the artists can make a beatiful environment for people to enjoy and attract more visitors. Science shows people involve in art are less depressed and therefore less health problem.
Lastly, art makes people creative. Lots of kids with acess to better art program can join to the art clubs. This increase their creativity and benefit the society. People with better view to the world and creative help the country and society to develope more.
In conclusion, eventhough some beleive spending money in sports is more useful, I think art needs more support by the government. In most countries, art is overlooked by government and needs improvement. By spending more money in art program people and country would benefit more.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, lastly, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92786885246 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58561542937 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7025543912 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1052631579 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0526315789 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298113526103 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107245775352 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905085188351 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184398238911 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0928066622273 0.0645574589148 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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