It is obvious that in today's fast-paced world, both the arts and sport play a crucial role in the advancement of countries. Thus, it is essential that governments financially support these activies and try to improve their conditions. Even though some people assert that it is much beneficial for countries to assign more budget to athletics, I strongly believe that governments should spend more money to support the arts. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my ciew using some reasons and examples.
To begin with, I think although the arts and sport are both important elements in a society, the arts have more considerable impact on the development of the country in various aspects including culture, tradition, lifestyle, and so on. In other words, the arts form and build the history of a country and thus it is necessary for goverments to pay a great deal of attention to the arts. In fact, they should make plenty of attempt to give financial assistance to preserve the arts in a country. For instance, in my country, some arts such as hand artworks have been distinguished because of the fact that they did not get enough financial aids from the governments. As a result, they couldnot survive, and even there are not the historical evidence about them in order to disply in museums.
Secondly, I believe that the arts need more money and investment than the athletics because they have less variety than the arts, and it is possible that the athletics themselves are enough wealthy and hence they do not require to receive financial support from governments. Also, in the society, there are some presons who help these teams because they have high level of wealth, and due to the fact that they are interested in these activities, they will devote part of their properties to assisting these athletics in their activities. For example, in some advanced countries goverments do not spend a lot of money to helping the Olympic teams because there are famous people who dedicate their wealth to the improvement of the situation of these teams. As a matter of fact, this measure will help them to raise thei social status in their society and to acquire higher fame.
To sum up, according to the points mentioned above, I believe that it is much better for governments to assign more budget to the arts rather than the athletes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... to the arts. In fact, they should make plenty of attempt to give financial assistance to preserv...
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...h wealthy and hence they do not require to receive financial support from governments. Als...
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...t to the arts rather than the athletes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85286783042 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64738323746 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486284289277 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7445177642 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6428571429 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3571428571 5.45110844103 227% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260508693195 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824186665162 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079845029591 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156185162504 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498271642973 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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