Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

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Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

As a human culture heritage, art not only combines people’s wisdom and creativity, but also represents the unique tradition. Therefore, in order to pass it on, the purity and uniqueness of art should be preserved well. Government is responsible to give the financial support, especially for those art full of historical value. The truth is same with sports. The meaning of Olympic teams has been more than the original goal of keeping fit and accumulating strength. the prosperous sports of a nation marks the whole level of and the comprehensive ability of the nation. Therefore art and sports both should be supported financially by governments.

First of all, the support from government is conducive to protecting the traditional art formation. Nowadays, due to the ignorance of young people, many heritages our ancestors left are facing dangers. Take Chinese paintings as an example. Although Chinese paintings possesses thousands of years of history, young artists express more passion for modern art formation. Many art school even cancelled the courses concerning traditional Chinese paintings. If financial support was given, some young artists may start to engage in this kind of traditional art formation, subsequently more Chinese paintings exhibitions may attract people’s attention. In this way, it might get people’s attention again. Once a certain art formation is bought to the limelight, its value will be acknowledged by more people, and youngsters will tend to start to cherish the hidden essences and provide their own support.

Besides, if more foundations were built, the national art will have the opportunity to be accepted by the whole world. Great artists or groups will get supported to go on a world show tour. They will take advantage of these international tours to spread the essences and value of the art and get them understood by foreigners. Once a certain art formation gained the reputation abroad, its impact will stretched out. Peking opera is a good example. If this culture treasure could perform in other nations, it will be the window through which outer world know the uniqueness of Chinese culture and Chinese value.

In the same way, money spent in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams by government benefits athletics and the nation. With the financial support from government, coaches and athletics can possess better training instruments. Higher pay can also improve athletics’ life and health conditions. Apart from these, setting up a more scientific and developed sports competitive system helps cultivate potential members who can get gold medals in international competition such as Olympics, obtaining honor for the nation and their families. So the international image of the nation enhanced enormously.

Those essences hidden in the different art formations are supposed to be acknowledged by the public. The involves support from government. Only with an energetic and efficient national support system was built and developed, art and sports will be acknowledged and supported by all the people.

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Average: 9.7 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, apart from, kind of, such as, first of all, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2636.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45755693582 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00664319398 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530020703934 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.1789899707 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8965517241 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6551724138 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319762766505 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795001129255 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905088715483 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176270789042 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609075295016 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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