Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is obvious that in today's fact-paced world, with the development of technology, it is essential that societies pass strict rules for people in order to improve their living conditions in society. In fact, these rules will guarantee the healthy lifestyle of humans in their society. Even though, some people assert that these regulations are very severe for young people to obey, I believe that these strict rules are necessary tools to have a healthy life and they are not very strict youngsters to comply. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
To begin with, I think that societies need to establish laws people have to follow in order to providing an appropriate environment for them to live. These rules are not very exacting and demanding for the young to pursue because they must know that without these rules, they are not capable of living with clamness. In othe words, If they are aware of the advantages of these rules, it will not difficult for them to abey these rules. In fact, if they do not follow these rules, they will face a lot of obstacles in their lives, which it makes it hard for them to achieve theor goals. For instance, in my country, the young are not allowed to take part in some places. If thet enter these places, they will be penalized. This rules are highly beneficial for them because it will help them to concentrate better on their studies, and they will not waste their time on these places. In fact, because young people are conscious about the benefits of these rules, it is not hard for them to follow them.
Secondly, I believe that these rules are not too strict for juvenilesto follow, because they have enough physical ability to perform these rules. Also, if these rule are not very strict, they will not follow them. As a matter of fact, being strict is an crucial factor to stimulate young individuals to assent these rules. It is possible that they disobey the easy requlations. For example, in my country, the young do not obey rules which they will not be punished when they do not perform them.
To sum up, according to the points mentioned above, these rules are not very hard for the young to obey.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, as a matter of fact, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67095115681 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33474507295 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424164524422 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6062108403 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.944444444 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185597383359 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797659915683 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543333900962 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143797098572 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053227665301 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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