It is obvious that people are willing to experience different things in their lifespan and it is enjoyable for them. Undoubtedly doing various activities needs enough time, money, energy, and so on. In other words, different factors affect individual’s success in their intended task. I strongly believe that people who are trying to do too many diverse activities are not able to do all of them successfully and get good results in entire fields. In the following paragraph, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think if people are looking to carry out many various tasks at the same time, it will prevent them from concentrating enough on all their activities. As a result, they are not successful in all affairs and cannot achieve their objectives. Furthermore, individuals who involve in different activities cannot assign enough time to each of their tasks. Therefore, they do not succeed in doing their whole jobs. They do not have opportunity to pay sufficient attentions to all affairs. That is, they are not able to satisfy their aims in some areas. For example, when I was a student at high school, in addition to doing school work I took part in different group activities and played football, and attended English learning classes. Therefore I could not concentrate on my studies effectively and unfortunately was not capable of fulfilling my goals and getting good grades.
To sum up, in my point of view, being busy doing diverse things will waste your time and energy and you cannot be successful in all areas. It is helpful for people dedicate their time and energy to their favorite activities. Thus, it helps them to achieve their goals and to get desirable results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 734, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... and attended English learning classes. Therefore I could not concentrate on my studies e...
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Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eir goals and to get desirable results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97222222222 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77943526938 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548611111111 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3160069541 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217176269707 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770614241217 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659351855985 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157976561076 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489164019166 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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