It is obvious that in today’s fast-paced word humans are willing to spend their free time doing favorite activities including watching films and movies, reading books, playing computer games, and so on in order to relax themselves and to get prepared for doing their other tasks. I strongly believe that it is much better for people to get relaxed by means of doing physical exercise instead of watching a film or reading a book. In the following paragraph, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think playing sport and doing physical exercise not only helps them to relax themselves and to be psychologically healthier but also helps them to be bodily healthy. In other words, doing physical activities gives people a good opportunity to use their leisure time in the best way. For example, one of my friends prefers to watch TV rather than doing exercise, and he is accustomed to eat sugary things while watching films. Therefore, it led him to be very fat, and he suffers from obesity.
Moreover, I believe that doing physical activities makes it possible for individuals to communicate with others and to make new friends, while carrying out tasks such as viewing films or reading books does not give them this situation. For instance, I always assign my free time to exercising in parks and natural environment. As a result, it allows me to get relaxed and happy; also, I will get enough energy to concentrate better on my studies. In addition, I could find a good friend who helps me to doing my research projects.
To sum up, in my point of view, it is more beneficial for people to do physical exercise rather than performing activities like watching movies or reading books because it not only helps them to be emotionally and physically healthy but also gives them a good chance to make new friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 374, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to eating'.
Suggestion: accustomed to eating
...V rather than doing exercise, and he is accustomed to eat sugary things while watching films. The...
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Line 2, column 495, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... very fat, and he suffers from obesity. Moreover, I believe that doing physical ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hem a good chance to make new friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81388012618 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67597151942 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542586750789 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1722376185 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.166666667 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5833333333 5.45110844103 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350655247264 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131233818046 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11269059959 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235963582892 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545154569714 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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