A high school is thinking about making one of the following classes a required class for high school students: personal finance management, cooking class, or auto repair. Which option will you recommend high school students to take at school and why?

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A high school is thinking about making one of the following classes a required class for high school students: personal finance management, cooking class, or auto repair. Which option will you recommend high school students to take at school and why?

With the advent of technology and the arrival of globalization, people nowadays are required to learn as much as possible in order to stay competitive. To reflect this trend, many educators and curriculum designers have begun to overhaul and redesign curricula in order to accommodate students’ needs. High school students are no exception. Although they are pretty preoccupied with their academic work, they should also invest their energy in their extracurriculars so that they can pinpoint their passion and figure out their future career direction. If a high school is about to make one of the classes listed in the prompt required, I would recommend high school students to take classes in personal finance management.

To begin with, learning how to manage one’s finances responsibly and carefully allows high-school students to gain the right concept of money. To be more specific, if high-school students begin to learn as early as possible how much they save or spend each month, they would realize that the money that parents earn is hard-earned and they should treat it more seriously, carefully, and responsibly. When I was in grade twelve, my parents would give me about one thousand dollars each month to help cover my daily expenses. At first, I just engaged in impulsive shopping from time to time, and I ended up spending it all in a week. My parents, after knowing this, were pretty upset and decided not to give me the pocket money for one month as a penalty so that I could realize how hard it was to making a living. Having lived for one month without any financial support, I finally came to the realization that I had been careless in my spending behavior and that indeed, it was not easy to be the breadwinner. After this incident, I carefully documented my monthly expenses and savings thereafter, and would always ask myself many times before making any purchase: Was this thing really necessary? “A penny saved is a penny earned,” said by Benjamin Franklin. Not only was I able to cut down my expenses with my financial management habit but also I could save about two hundred dollars now every month.

Furthermore, taking personal financial management class gives students an opportunity to think about and plan their future. Students could contemplate over what they hope to accomplish and how much finance they would need, which could motivate and guide them to achieve their goals in a more systematic way. For instance, my uncle had always wanted to be an entrepreneur, especially in the domain of online-shopping and he knew that he would need bags of cash and money in order to start up his company. Therefore, since he was in the tenth grade, he took some personal financial courses and started to calculate how much money was required for him to initiate a business entity. In the class, he learned how to use the spreadsheet or the graphs to monitor his spending and expenditure early on. He was eventually able to save a large sum of money to have his own business, where he applied the same knowledge and skill, and his business has hence been booming.

Irrefutably, some dissidents may disavow my arguments by claiming that cooking or auto repair class might be more beneficial for high-school students. For instance, high-school students can learn how to eat healthy. They could know the nutritional values in all sorts of food products and materials once they learn how to cook. On the other hand, students learning how to repair cars can help them save some money since they do not have to send their cars for maintenance and repairs. However, have these people forgotten that the immediacy of using these skills is not as much as that of knowing how to manage money? That is, managing money is not only crucial but urgent since high-school students need to learn how to budget their money wisely for their future use, such as tuition for college or funds for start-ups. Have these people not realized that having a correct mindset of how to use money takes precedence? If high-school students waste money on superfluous items, their future will be dimmed. Therefore, acquiring a correct financial concept is paramount. After all, as Benjamin Franklin commented, “An investment in knowledge pays the best interest.”

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, after all, as to, for instance, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3578.0 1977.66487455 181% => OK
No of words: 720.0 407.700716846 177% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96944444444 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.18004012822 4.48103885553 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74580347592 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 350.0 212.727598566 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486111111111 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1108.8 618.680645161 179% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5524862029 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.266666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36666666667 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276476858996 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915195240665 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13879085936 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186523090727 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907613845016 0.0645574589148 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 86.8835125448 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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