How do movies and television influence people's behavior?
In my point of view, movies and televisions play a crucial role in people's lives especially have an incredible influence on people's behave. Although some are inclined toward the opinion that movie and television do not have any influence on people's behavior, on the other extreme of the rope, some believe that movies and serials can change people's behavior and culture. Although both sides take their own positions, from my vantage point, the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some conspicuous aspects which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
First, I deeply believe that movies and television can improve people's social relationships and teach them how to communicate with other people. Five years ago a broad research on people's behavior showed that many of them design a pattern which they see and learn from movies and television for their lives and behavior. Actually, they behave according to that movies and serials. For example, last year I went to Mexico to see my brother. He lived with his wife in a small town near a Mexico City and all their neighbors spoke Spanish. I could not speak Spanish very well and I did not know how to behave to their neighbors and I was confused there. Since they watched Latin serials every night after three months, I learned their culture and Spanish pronunciation. Actually, that Latin serials taught me how to speak Spanish and communicate with people there. I had learned their culture by watching Spanish channel and movies. Therefore, I never forget that serial's influence on myself.
The second reason coming to my mind cogently vindicate my standpoint concerned with this issue is that movie and television can teach people different experiences and prevent them to come across a problem. For instance, last year I watched a movie about the young student who used the addictive drugs. He was a very clever student but their family could not pay attention to him and after two semesters he lost his self-confidence and began to use addictive drugs. After that movie, I decided to control my son's activities and talk to him always and identify his problems. Now, I think that movie has a dramatic influence on me and I propose it to my friends to watch that as soon as possible.
To put everything in a nutshell and broad lookover the main points and discussions reveal the fact that movies and television can improve people's culture and behaviors. People can watch different stories about other people's lives and learn and implement their experiences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'broad research'.
Suggestion: broad research
...icate with other people. Five years ago a broad research on peoples behavior showed that many of...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... learn and implement their experiences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97906976744 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60222166594 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513953488372 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7965529602 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.952380952 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334580704014 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930984651434 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105203687724 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206938251019 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784732397913 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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