TPO3- It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Agree or not?
At every turn of each individual life, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of friends on people’s lives. Some people are of the opinion that making new friends is more important and is better for people. On the other extreme of the rope, others believe that keeping old friends and strengthening the relationship with them has numerous advantages. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, having an outgoing personality and developing a relationship with new friends exposures people to innovative ideas and helps them learn various functional and helpful skills. In other words, new friends having valuable experiences and rational approaches can develop people’s knowledge, expand their horizons and help them effectively achieve their goals. Take my own experience as a compelling example. When I was working as an industrial engineer at a company, I decided to make friends with foreign engineers to learn their skills and abilities. They taught me various economy concepts, how to find viable solutions, and deal properly and efficiently with problems and unprecedented challenges in quality control. After six months, I could solve and modify production scheduling bringing about to deliver all products on the due date and attract many customers. Subsequently, I gained a lot of profit. Therefore, if I hadn't made new friends and gained valuable experiences, nor could I improve the production level neither could I earn a lot of money.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that, meeting new friends relieve people’s stress and worries and increases their self-confidence. To be more specific, people’s characteristics and talents have been commonplace for their old friends; thus, communicating with new friends seeing them with fresh eyes and open hearts recalls them their talents, strengths, and abilities which encourages people to come out their shell, speak about their anxieties, problems and try to solve them. For instance, empirical research conducted by some master psychology students shows that people trying to make a relationship with new persons are always happy and have positive energy. Actually, establishing relationships with new friends helps people to join sports teams and attend social groups which gives them an outlet to process difficult emotions and encourages them to get out of their routine, find their hidden talent, be socially active, and create new adventures keeping people away from stressful situations. Lack of social activity obviously takes opportunities away from them by bringing them into mental conflict. Hence, the more people make new friends, the more self-confidence they will obtain and the less serious mental problems such as isolation and introspection they will encounter.
In conclusion, taking the above reasons into account, I strongly believe that, making new friends not only opens up a whole gamut of new valuable experiences and splendid ideas for people but it also helps them alleviate their recurrent anxiety and depression, be happy and energetic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 962, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...gained a lot of profit. Therefore, if I hadnt made new friends and gained valuable ex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2802.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4513618677 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95486032901 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56420233463 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.2125925276 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.1 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204331231787 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663826248275 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670011280572 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138799447688 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417642257232 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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