If one of your friends has the opportunity to study in either one of two majors, which one of the following majors you will recommend:
1)A major that would allow your friend to complete studies and get a degree faster (so that he or she can get a full time job sooner)
2)A major that would require longer time to study, but can make it more likely to get better employment opportunities and job offers in the future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. "
Education is the most straightforward way to succeed in the competitive world. Choosing the right field is really necessary to earn money. Instinctively, some people prefer to graduate early to find full-time job while others, including me, thinks opposite. Personally speaking, I believe that studying in major required many years far more outnumber any negative repercussion.
To begin with, many year of study makes up a solid background with depth theoretical knowledge in that major. It is a prerequisite base in order to become an expert for long field everyone should go for long course. Especially, most companies and organizations nowadays give preference to those having extensive and advanced knowledge of the work, and they are not easy to relieve. For instance, the crisis in 2008, thousands of employees were terminated to maintain the companies. However, the people who highly admitted in their field merely influenced from it. Therefore, studying in long-term major contributes a strong background which advances in the future.
Moreover, by spending period of time on working in one field, people have a great chance to interact with professors who have become the leading authority in their field. People like them have experiences and kills could not be acquired on books or internet. It is impossible for most people to encounter in person. However, in campus, they are not willing to teach you, but also guide you in a variety of project. Moreover, having a good impression with them provide a great chance to get offers from popular organization because the professors can recommend their discipline to these companies. As a result, studying in one major in a long time increases chances to have a relationship with experts.
To wrap it up, I strongly recommend that people should take a major for many year for many benefits. It may provide a strong background in a field and encounter top professors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... outnumber any negative repercussion. To begin with, many year of study makes ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'many years'.
Suggestion: many years
...tive repercussion. To begin with, many year of study makes up a solid background wi...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... the future. Moreover, by spending period of time on working in one field, people have a ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'many years'.
Suggestion: many years
...end that people should take a major for many year for many benefits. It may provide a str...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, while, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19808306709 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92603969479 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591054313099 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2807940326 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3888888889 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128344217203 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0387320656804 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506528922081 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071192687433 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328936417649 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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