If the university should spend money on building a quiet place to study or building a gym or building a place to play games. which choice you like and why?
Hectic studying life has a tremendous impact on young people. Some young individuals like to have a quiet place to study. While others like to have a club in order to have fun. From my vantage point, I believe that building a gym could have a lot of benefits in many realms for the following reasons.
To begin with, building the gym could improve students' health. They can enhance their education level because they have wellness. For instance, When I was an undergraduate, I engaged in the sport's class in my college. I could have an athletic healthy body because I performed different types of physical activities. I could study for a long time and afford staying without sleep because sports activities learn people how to be patient. On the other hand, my friend did not like to go to the gym. He was obese and could not execute hard activities. He spent most of his time in a sleep. All these features have a negative impact on his level of education and grades. Consequently, Being engaged in a gym help young people to have a healthy and beautiful body.
Finally, building a gym helps young students to have fun and save money. For instance, most students do not have enough time to execute their activities. They spend most of the time in studying. When they have spare time in university they can go to a gym and perform sports activities. They can have a lot of fun with their colleagues. These activities can help them to reduce their stress and tension. Moreover, they will not need to pay money. They will save a lot of money because they do not pay fees for the university's gym. On the other hand, Most of the sport's locations are too expensive. Students will waste there time and money if their college does not have a gym.
To wrap it up, Building a gym is better for students than other alternatives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ls like to have a quiet place to study. While others like to have a club in order to ...
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Line 4, column 358, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to stay'.
Suggestion: to stay
... could study for a long time and afford staying without sleep because sports activities...
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Line 4, column 412, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...t sleep because sports activities learn people how to be patient. On the other hand, m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, if, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58536585366 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52279907435 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466463414634 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.8336987247 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.16 100.406767564 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.12 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156555981412 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502111066021 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582820110111 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120293858014 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369768404837 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 11.7677419355 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.45 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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