If you could change one important thing about your country, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answers.

Every country has disadvantages that people want to change in their own country. My hometown is Iran. If I can change something in my country, I would change the rules. If the laws are corrected and do new laws, therefore the quality of people lives would get better.

First, changing the laws and updating them is one of the most important changes in the country. for example, Iran is a Muslim country that, under the law, father of the family, is allowed to kill his daughter. And no law will punish him. Actually, it's ridiculous, but it happened many times in my country. Last 3 months, news reported a father killed his 3 daughters at home with a knife. When the police asked him "why did you do that?" he answered: I was protecting my daughters from an evil. People expected, the government must imprison him by law. However, the judge released him because he was their father. There is no law protecting children's rights in Iran.

Second, today, animal rights are being followed around the world and there is a law to protect them, but hundreds of homeless dogs are reportedly killed by municipalities in Iran every day. Just a few weeks ago, dogs were killed in an area near the Tehran (capital city of Iran) with an injection of acid syringe. After several demonstrations, but even after popular demonstration, homeless dogs in the parks were killed by gunshots, and their bodies were found burned.

Third, we have many fault laws in Iran, the worst one is, women have to wear hijab, that is force them to wear what the government like. when women don't like to obey the government, they punish those women. Those women who do not have Islamic hijab, like, short-sleeve Mantos, who do not confirm to Islamic dress, forcefully enter the police car and make documents for them as if they had committed a bad crime. But in normal way, it is the right of every people to choose his or her own dress. nobody must not force them.

In conclusion, the law on child protection and animal protection and optional dressing are simple rules that apply in all countries, but in our country are no more than a dream. I wish I could really change the laws of my country so that the people of my land could live in peace, love and security.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, third, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5033777182 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5575 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7943217662 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5652173913 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3913043478 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30434782609 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11307209709 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373110776662 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717288334641 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690301635582 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607601614502 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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