If you could change one important thing about your hometown what would you change Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

I have lived in my hometown my entire life, and I find this town comfortable for live, because it is compact, but it provides great opportunities for people living here. However, there are some advantages and disadvantages in every place in the world. I found some things which I would like to change about my city.

My city is small; there is not a lot of population here. Personally I love such little towns for being very good for life. For example, I do not have to spend a lot of time on my road somewhere. Despite the fact that the square of my hometown is not great, I still have problems with getting around. I think that the local transportation system does not suit with growing population. It is absolutely impossible to hit on a bus in the mornings and nights that is why I have to spend my money on taxi. I think that it would be great to add several new buses. Either the alternative way to solve the problem would be building the subway.

When I think about the next thing I would like to improve here, I think about parks and walking zones for people. A modern city should have not only job places for residents, schools, hospitals, but also many places for spending leisure time. I think the officials should really do something about this in my town. There is only one central park, which is not a very big. Moreover, I find it very boring. There are not any fountains, monuments or other decorations. I wish the park would be reconstructed. I am excited of the idea to broad and adorn it.

Finally, I would like to change it is making special roots for bicycles. It is a real problem for me as a person who has a bike. I have got two options: either riding on roads near cars or having a ride on sideways there are a lot of pedestrians. The first is very dangerous, because cars drives so fast, the second – inconvenient, because there is lot of people on sideways and they disturb me. So, I really want lanes for bikes to be made.

To sum up, I like my city, because there is everything for happy and comfortable life for people of all ages, but still some things may be found to turn it to better. Personally I want to change the local transportation system, because of its discomfort; also to make the park more pleasant place to be is a great step for better life here. Last, but not least is making lines for cyclists.

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Average: 8.5 (11 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, still, for example, i think, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38584474886 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54320785927 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493150684932 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0029943033 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.1481481481 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18518518519 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0790879018407 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259280203856 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431409721224 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0525330139089 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241583494227 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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