Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the e

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.

Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

The statement above about the financial investments to big cities with the purpose of cultural retention is supported by the idea that only major cities carry cultural traditions. Based on the provided information, I completely disagree since the reasonable counterarguments can be found to oppose this claim.

The main proclaimed idea is to subsidize major cities to thrive culturally, although the point can be promulgate about whether money is a main tool which will contribute this prosperity. Perhaps, many other factors are more important then the financial support. So to preserve cultural traditions, the governments need to support with social programs while the main source of the financial aid will be non-government organizations which will find their own reasons to invest such programs.

Major cities can be characterized by the high density of people, and now with the globalization and open borders, the tendency of cultural diversity because of immigration processes is high in big cities. In the context of cultural traditions, these spots are good from the point of creating new ones on the joint of mixing up. Otherwise, the preservation of some cultural features presents a tough affair. For example, taking into account such multinational countries as Russia, the USA as a particular example, one can see that the most of original cultural traditions have vanished. There are still some places; the most of them are in the countryside, where traditions of people living thousands years ago are still preserved.

The idea of the financial support of major cities will not help to generate new traditions and save ones with their roots to ancestors, because these places are not primarily spots of this. The main reason why people move to big cities is building a strong career, thus they are focused mostly on this by forgetting and destroying their roots with the families. The opposite situation can be seen in the countryside, because people stay there because of the calmness of life, the strong relations with families and people around. Where do people know about each other more: either in mega policies or in villages? Since people live in small community in the countryside, they are more close to each other, and in particular parents to their kids. Thus, these are parents and grandparents those people who transport traditions to new generations, in the countryside one can see more contemporary presenting cultural traditions than in major cities.

To sum up, I do not agree with this statement for the main reasons as the financial aid is not the main instrument to help to preserve and generate traditions, moreover, main cities are not those places where cultural traditions are presented, because of the multinational population there and their estrangement from their roots.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... population there and their estrangement from their roots.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, in particular, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24282560706 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90668547849 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472406181015 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.78403542 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.705882353 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6470588235 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260899365635 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851033140652 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642684394201 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162068618312 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412301790543 0.0667264976115 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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