• Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
While a prospective student is choosing a university to continue his or her education, the opportunity of financing this education may be the key point in applying for this or that university or institute. One of the ways which take students for financing their education is working during their studying. And while some believe that this is the best solution who whose who cannot afford their education, I believe it is better to take out various loans which are provided by a university.
The first reason why I think that students should better take loans rather than work is that their job may negative cause their educational process. To cover all tuition a student may work extra hours that may lead to tiredness, sleepless, and the lack of concentration and attention. Moreover, a working student may skip classes, because his or her schedule at work and at university may be controversial. For example, when I was a third year student, I got a suggestion to work as an English teacher for children in a kindergarten. At first, I was so happy to give money to spend it on books, textbooks, and other important stuff, but when I had worked for a week, I started miss my classes, because I had to work in the mornings exactly when my classes started.
Likewise, a student who is working during a semester may receive lower marks and scores, because he or she will spend all his or her free time at work. Some universities stick to the principle that students should also work hard out of campus that is why students of such universities have a lot of tasks and projects to do. Doing them requires plenty of free time. For example, my friend, who is purchasing his bachelor program in the field of medicine, has a lot of various assignments. And he invests all his free time to finish them till their deadline.
To sum up, I think that students’ loans help students to be more focused on his or her education. Immersed only in studying, a student will not skip classes as well as will receive higher scores. That is why I believe that it is better to put a working experience off after graduation and use the ability to receive a loan to finance the education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, likewise, may, moreover, so, third, well, while, for example, i think, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65025906736 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74828465388 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487046632124 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4973272274 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.1875 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237248357576 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865059872182 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053875418187 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153123830891 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138777294469 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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