Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Universities and educational systems are like a bridge that connect theoretical science to experimental knowledge. People are going to universities to gain more knowledge. Later they will go and work to gain experiences. As a matter of fact, I disagree with the statement. In addition, I support the idea that students should work when they are in school.
First and foremost, students who are working while studying gain more experiences. They can understand the theories that presented by professor deeper. For instance, one of my friends worked in medical company as a research and development while he was studying biomedical whith me in University. He always understood the subject better because he worked so I believe it is much more better to work and do not take students loan.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be addressed in this ongoing explanation is that working give us the power to make more friends. More friends can lead us to have more and better connections in finding job and career. For example, most students can find job and new opportunity by calling their friends and their previous colleagues thus it is better to work sametime while we are going to school.
Last but not least important, all the loans specially students loan has a high interest rate. By taking loan we have to pay the interest and if we can not find job it will ruin our credit history.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 380, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...cause he worked so I believe it is much more better to work and do not take students loan. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 236.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93220338983 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76952731135 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572033898305 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2558720204 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1428571429 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217437484363 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774704061218 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685699408263 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128262040176 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362009574683 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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