Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many students manage to work part time while studying, others prefer to take student loans to spend all of their time in studies. In my opinion, I would agree with the statement that students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying for a few reasons and also because of some personal experiences.
Firstly, when we are working while studying, the schedule becomes hectic and requires great time management. There are many situations when it becomes difficult to handle the job and scoring good marks all together. Some students might get paid good money for their work, but might lack good marks or the situation can be reverse. Also, there are some students who can manage to do both the things, but these cases are rare. For example, my cousin used to work in Burger King as a part-time while studying his masters and used to follow a strict time table to manage his studies with his work. But at the end of the day, he didn't use to have enough time for self-studying, which cost him his grades.
Secondly, if we will be focusing only on our studies during the college and build up great skills in the field, there are greater chances of getting a well-qualified and well-paid job, good enough to pay for the student loans in a year or two. Moreover, what we learn during our college will always be useful for our future, and it is the best time to learn something new or to experiment new fields. If we spend this time working in some part-time jobs, there are chances we might get bounded only with the classes and with the job and couldn't focus on developing other skills require for a professional job.
For instance, when I started my undergraduate degree, I also started working in an ice cream shop as a part-time manager. This surely helped me with some extra money, but I couldn't focus on learning new programming skills and this was the reason why I left the job after six months. Because to become a good software engineer one has to be good in programming, and this was thing I was lacking the most in. By the end of second year of college, I learnt programming languages like C# and Java and started building projects because of which I also got a summer internship with a great stipend.
Hence, in my opinion students should spend all of their college or school time in studying and learning new skills, which help them get a well-paid job and should take out loans to avoid working while studying.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: part-time
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Suggestion: couldn't
... helped me with some extra money, but I couldnt focus on learning new programming skill...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...end of second year of college, I learnt programming languages like C# and Java and started ...
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Suggestion:
...summer internship with a great stipend. Hence, in my opinion students should spe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62242562929 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42567246626 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480549199085 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.020547404 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.25 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3125 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256672025377 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955836432799 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10718366468 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187690194009 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140822126933 0.0645574589148 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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