Businesses should hire the employees for their entire lives. Agree or disagree?
Businesses are made with the thought of long run process which ensures jobs for a lot of people. Since, there are many people working at different positions, some work passionately while some lethargically. In my view I'd disagree with the statement that businesses should hire the employees for their entire lives because some employees wish to switch their jobs once in a while and also, there are many employees who do not work hard enough to be suitable for the job.
Firstly, some employees wish to change their job once in a while. There are some people who consider working in different environments and would not prefer to go to the same office for the rest of their life. For example, my uncle in London is a software engineer. He does love his work but for better experience and enhancement of the field he wishes to work in different companies, which makes him switch jobs every 5 to 6 years. And I believe because of such habit of his, he knows more people and have a large network as compared to what he would have had if he was working in the same company.
Second, some people aren't suitable for the job. There are so many cases in a multi-national company where in the starting, many employees show passion towards their job, but after a while they might not be working hard enough or might show no progress. Because of such issues, company needs to let go some employees and hiring such employees for their entire lives seems like a tough job for both the company and the employees. Moreover, there can be an alter in the situation, for example, when an employee is working hard enough and the company is benefited from his progress, he deserves a promotion and, in that case, he can be employed at a higher position. So, to hire him for the same position or job for his entire life can be considered injustice.
Furthermore, business's hiring employees for their entire lives can be an option for the employees, but should never be a compulsion or else it might feel like an obligation for the employees and also for the company.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, while, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63114754098 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53556181658 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467213114754 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.7452130822 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.071428571 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314405127917 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1248207543 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11906302423 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23452754382 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923793940577 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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