If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
I would love to change the infrastructure in my hometown. Despite the advanced facility, they put in the middle of the city; there is still a lack of sophistication in our bridges, skyscraper, and automated vending machine and even in our glass roof stadium. The infrastructure played a big part to mark the milestone of country development. It could be amalgam between traditional style with eclectic modern feels, but the newest technology needs to corporate in new equipment.
Improvement in infrastructure would become the first pathway of modernization. In addition to the cosmopolitan community, the brand new facility would help my residency to grow. Technology could become inexorable and to follow the trends, we need to keep up. Moreover, the preservation of ancient building will become a bucolic aspect of this country. Side by side with the Avant-grade buildings, my hometown will become a dashing new place.
There will be a side effect of all this new addition. One of it is increasing the number of negligent people. Technology in all aspect of our lives will affect our ability to compromise with complication. Our live will depends so much with automation, once its turn off, we will all go to immediate hysteria. Moreover, the dependency to technology in our new infrastructure will affect our civilization. Before our race is well known for their athleticism, agility, altruism and drudgery, with this new addition, little by little, these traits will be lost.
However, my hometown has been kept the same way for almost 50 years, without improvement and innovation, this city will steadfast and being left behind by others. The technology will bring fresh air. The brand new infrastructure will make betterment in my people economy and social life, I believe, my hometown will become famous around the globe.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'depend'
Suggestion: depend
...romise with complication. Our live will depends so much with automation, once its turn ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.0286738351 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19865319865 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0606560652 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569023569024 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0386726717 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7777777778 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0517197532178 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246079302494 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450506287259 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.038725011733 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246846303698 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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