If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what wouldyou change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what wouldyou change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

If i can change one thing important thing about my hometown,it will be the sports facilties in the town.

My hometown is Shamli, which is a small town. Shamli has appropriate number of good schools, hospitals ansd colleges but sports facilities in town are poor. There is no proper stadium and grounds, thats made it difficult to arrange sports tournament. Earlier Shamli used to have multi facility sports complex but because of some political issue it was converted into shopping complex.

Moreover, childrens and other players have to travel twenty miles to Meerut for training and coaching. As there is lack of sports facilities in town, number of good coaches is also less. Childrens have to maintain their study, travel to other city to take part in practise, and then come back to the city, which makes childrens exhausted to do anything else. Due to this many families had relocated to another city. For example, Indian cricket player,Rishab Pant has told in an interview that he has to travel 20 miles everyday which hampered his practise time and studies, So his family relocated to different town when he was kid.

.Furthermore, as no good grounds or stadium are available, good quality games usually does not happen in city. As there are very less only local tournaments,childrens does not get motivated to take part in sports.It is evident from the fact that onlfive percent children take partin sports activities afterhigh school while in neighbouring town it is 25 percent. There is only a basketball team from school that competes on national level that too because as one of the schools had good basketball courts and training facilities and captain of team is famous prodigy. Parents have to take children to differnt city to show them good quality matches.

So if sports facilities in town are improved will players, childrens to take part in sports activities. It will make sure that childrens are developing mentally as well as physically. It will save time and money of sports lover who travels to different cities to watch games.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, as to, for example, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99127906977 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70784064523 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566860465116 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8875539375 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2352941176 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0527884333151 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0209383481963 0.076458572812 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623279132584 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0606836861316 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102841882503 0.0645574589148 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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