If you need to improve your performance in order to get better
promotion or higher work payment in a company ,which way would you
choose？
A.doing more extra work or assignments that are required
extra work
B.participating more actively or contributing your own idea more
frequently in the group discussion
In modern society, the social competetion become more and more fierce, people are all devoted to find a promising job after their graduation and be promoted quickly in the company. Some individuals
think that they should do more extra work so that they can be appreaciated by boss and coworkers. However, in my oppnion, the most significant thing we should do is that paticipating in programs more actively and contributing our own thoughts more in the team discussion.
Participating projects and offering our own ideas will helps us to be acquainted with individuals from all profession class in our firms. Because be more active in the company can help us be seen by more people. In the process, we can inevitably have more frequent communications with colleagues and exchange our ideas with each other. Thus, the advantages and intelligence of us can be displayed and appreciated by boss and others. My own experience is a compelling example of this evidence. Two years ago, I was merely a general worker in my company, I seized a an opportunity because of attending a important project of foreign commercial. At that time, I took my advantage of excellent oral English to communicate with the presentatives from US, and also gave many critical suggestions of my study field. Undoubtly, this program was really a success and I got along well with my coworkers. Soon I was promoted to be the assistant of CEO owing to do things actively. If I just work overnight everyday, I won't be so luck.
The other persuasive reason for the latter solution is that we can rich our own work experience when doing the program. Finishing much more extra assignments by repeting things mechanically is just boring and is not beneficial for our accumulation. Take my friend Tom as an example, he is actually a hardworking person, and not only complete his own work but also help others to do the same tasks. B
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...rojects and offering our own ideas will helps us to be acquainted with individuals fr...
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Line 4, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...from all profession class in our firms. Because be more active in the company can help ...
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Line 4, column 563, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... general worker in my company, I seized a an opportunity because of attending a i...
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Line 4, column 563, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
... general worker in my company, I seized a an opportunity because of attending a impo...
^^^^
Line 4, column 601, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d a an opportunity because of attending a important project of foreign commercial...
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Line 4, column 996, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ings actively. If I just work overnight everyday, I wont be so luck. The other persua...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, really, so, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87692307692 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98217822778 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575384615385 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2487559516 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0625 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165301431552 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574903101607 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555935266203 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121618157811 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585413535139 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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