If you want to change one aspect to improve your health, which would you choose? Why?
1. The kinds of food you eat
2. The amount of the exercise you do
3. The amount of the stress in your life
In this world, health is the cornerstone of everybody’s desired life. In this regard, people try different ways to improve their well-being, three of the most important strategies can be healthy diets, controlling the amount of exercising, or coping with the quantity of stress. I personally believe that the third option is more effective due to two main reasons which will be demonstrated in the following essay.
First and foremost, the most pivotal role of stress on impacting health is contributing, direct or indirect, to the very dangerous cardiovascular diseases such as heart attack. In other words, recent research has pointed out that individuals who have undergone several stressful life events in their lifetime have a very high probability of facing these types of illnesses. To expand, having a defined amount of stress can even have a positive effect on life, but chronic stress can harm people’s health; facing stressors continuously leads to elevated hormones such as cortisol resulting in symptoms like headache, high blood pressure, and heart palpitations. Consequently, people in such conditions would be more susceptible to illnesses correlated to the aforementioned symptoms. Now, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that regular exercising alleviates or reduces tension, but the truth is that it cannot prevent it or get rid of it completely. To make the explanation more clear, a young man in our neighborhood had a corporation. His logic for the healthy life was: get up early, go to the factory, ride to the gym at night, and eat the foods doctors write a prescription for them!. But he neglected that he had ignored a crucial factor, live in peace. After he got a heart attack, doctors forbade him from eating or working in a stressful atmosphere. Therefore, for a healthier life, individuals need to prevent life-threatening diseases by controlling the amount of stress.
Last but not least, a stressful life can cause low self-esteem resulting in mental illnesses like depression and isolation, the presence of which is a pivotal element in the healthy life. A painful fact is that today’s world suffers from epidemic of low self-esteem which is tied up with a vital factor called stressful life conditions-- financial troubles, being bullied, relationship breakdowns, and so forth on; when people experience such conditions, they think they are treated worthless by others resulting in doubting in themselves. In the meantime, they would escape from people and become isolated ending up in deep depressions and anxiety, which could cause them to harm themselves physically or mentally— suicide, drugs, and bad diet habits. By managing stress, however, people can have a very positive self-image which would cause them to interact with as many people as they can which would bring a much happier life.
To sum up, by managing stress one can not only reduce the probability of being vulnerable to hypertension-related illnesses but also psychological distresses such as lack of self-respect; it impacts two vital factors in the healthy lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, third, well, such as, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2611.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25352112676 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13222489672 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557344064386 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 792.0 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.2913179302 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.055555556 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6111111111 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125772959302 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417013837943 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0285814499276 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0733121149827 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027011347299 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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