If you want to get promoted or get a raise in your work, which way do you choose?
1-do additional work 2-take part in the group more actively and express your ideas.
Nobody can cast doubt on the fact that career improvement is a crucial element in the working. Owing to the fact that most of the people are want to heighten their job circumstances in the first day of work. This dream need a step by step plan to turn to a real target. While many people would rather that hardworking is a suitable way for career improvement, I prefer an idea that teamwork and being more socialize with co-workers is more effective. There are a myriad of reasons to justify this option, two of them which are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
The most prominent reason that can substantially justify this viewpoint is the fact that an employee output is determinates by another people such as human resource manager or project manager and being an effective member in the group is really precious for managers. With this in mind it should be mentioned that such managers are really appreciate the teamwork ability in an employee and give credit to it. Therefor if people want to attain successfulness in their career, they should exhibit more teamwork ability to their managers. For example, assume a fire station manager who wants to choose a person in charge to fire fighters team, actually he opt the one who show more co-work with the collogues. In addition a manager knows that a person with more flexibility in relation with others, is more effective for organization.
Another logical reason that can be mentioned is that if the employees try to being socialize and exhibiting their suggestions, their creativity is growth. Creation is a brilliant ability for a person in the working environment. Owing to the fact that most of workers need this talent to devise their output more awesome. It should be noticed that by expressing ideas workers encourage to thinking and finding new solutions to problems. To more substantially support the above reason, I can refer to a study conducted in the local university in my town last year. The findings of research clearly demonstrated that there is a positive correlation between the creativity and the teamworking, with 10 percent increase in the creativity concurrent with growth in the teamworking.
As a result, to recapitulate that group working is an effective approach to improve career because a person with this ability is very interested between human resource managers. In addition team work and expressing the ideas help workers to boost their creativity as a skill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...-workers is more effective. There are a myriad of reasons to justify this option, two ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'appreciated'.
Suggestion: appreciated
...mentioned that such managers are really appreciate the teamwork ability in an employee and...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'opts'.
Suggestion: opts
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...how more co-work with the collogues. In addition a manager knows that a person with more...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the workers') or simply say ''most workers''.
Suggestion: most of the workers; most workers
...ing environment. Owing to the fact that most of workers need this talent to devise their output...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ted between human resource managers. In addition team work and expressing the ideas help...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, really, so, while, for example, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00486618005 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83943794987 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476885644769 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8397431775 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.277777778 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106583729942 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390556004009 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349184801873 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784199295333 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265528574708 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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