TPO51 Task2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, nobody can cast doubt on the fact that new technologies have a pivotal role in the humankind’s life. One of the most considerable technologies are Movie and television. These kinds of media are really favorite between teenagers. While many people adamantly believe that movie and television are not beneficial media for youngest, I fervently disagree with this idea. There are a host of reasons to support this belief. Two of which will elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
The most prominent reason which can substantially support this viewpoint is the fact that movie and television can help the juveniles to learn and increase their information about the world. They produce scientific programs such about many hysterical, natural and other fields of science. For example a television channel which is named the National Geographic is produce short video programs about animal’s life and their behavior ad natural instincts. This channel is really famous and popular between high school students. On the other hand, according to social media surveys this channel has a positive influence on the students. Since I think such another TV channels and Movies are beneficial for teenagers.
Another equally noteworthy reason to support this idea is the fact that most of the parents did not have enough time to spend with their young children. As a result the students will be alone in the home in a part of day. TV programs and Movies can be a positive friend for youngest in these times. Moreover, the parents can put control settings on their televisions in order to be sure about how the television programs will be suitable for children. To more substantially support the above reason I can refer to a study which was conducted in a local university in my town last year. The findings of the research explained that there is a positive correlation between TV controller programs which parents use and normal behavior in their children. With 25 per cent growth in using TV controller programs by parents there is a growth in school grades of students.
To recapulate, I believe that TV programs and movies have more positive impacts on juveniles than negative infaluences. I feel this way because they can learn many things of TV programs. In addition parents can use controller programs on TV and monitor their children movies
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, really, so, while, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10309278351 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8075091374 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471649484536 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2954994103 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171175741104 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533513560113 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045278428374 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115776794475 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274952270477 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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