TPO54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
From the general standpoint, in today’s sophisticated world we observe in which governmental programs to improve people’s life quality is one of the substantial need for all members in society in order to come to fruition and gather momentum. One of the controversial issues occupying the mind is the fact that whether the national budget should assign to social welfares such as art and sport or not. While many people adamantly hold the view that the national budget should designated to arts than sports I fervently concurred with this idea. There is a host of reasons to support this belief. Two of them which are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
The most prominent reason to support the idea is the fact that the enthusiastic observation in people growth by art. This feeling help the society members to reveal their mental issues such as anxiety and stress as a results of modern life. For instance, I can explain this by my own experience. I remember when I was a university student there was a public art museum in the vicinity of our university. Although is it really small, but whenever we visited that, we felt relaxed and comfort and forgotten our overthinking about university home works.
Another equally noteworthy reason to support the idea is the fact that artistic activities such art festivals are a great opportunity for government to present the society’s culture and history to the world. Moreover, if government sponsors art festivals it will bring financial benefits for them too.
As an example I can refer to a very famous annual dance festival in the Brazil. This festival backups by Brazilian prime minister and not only introduces the Brazil’s culture to the world but also brings a lot financial advantages for their government. Owing to the fact that many people from other countries travel to see this festival they spend a lot money in the brazil.
To recapitulate, I strongly believe that the government responsibility to take more resources on art than physical exercise. There is because of this decision helps society members feeling relax and decreases their stress in modern life and because bring financial benefit for government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, really, so, thus, while, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12154696133 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88840920329 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549723756906 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8224158143 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.058823529 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159924504038 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571901652388 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057550492163 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0899612413886 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438461331196 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.