TPO53-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From a general standpoint, in today’s sophisticated world we observe in which having social welfare is one of the substantial need for all members of society in order to come to fruition and gather momentum. Governments as the major responsible for this affording the social welfare, are commitment to preparing their community’s member’s essentials. Two of this social needs are Internet access and public transportation. While many people adamantly believe that the government should spend more financial budget on Internet access than public transportation, I fervently concurred with this idea. There are a myriad of reasons to support this believe. Two of them which are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
The most prominent reason to support the idea is the fact that the World Wide Web has a pivotal role in all society members’ life. Virtually, because of the technology involvement in society it cannot be able to imagine a country without the Internet. For example, imagine a day that World Wide Web will be disconnected in a society, bank transitions and medical activities will be harmed. Moreover, it will be dangerous because the risk of terrorists attacks owing to the fact that the online security services will be breakdown. For example, refer to a paper I read in a local newspaper last month, In the China most of financial and identical activities are doing by online social media such as watsapp. If their access to internet will cut, their social actions will issued by it.
Another equally noteworthy reason to support is that increasing the distribution of Internet by government helps people to use online resources to study and increase their knowledge about environment. As a result, people will be informed about importance of environmental activities and the role of environment in their society sustainability and resistance. Moreover, the society members will attain more knowledge about environmental pollutions and finally will increase environmental friendly activities such as using public transportation. Frankly, I believe that if the government want to extent the public transportation first should teach people about benefits of it. Internet access improvement will ease this teaching process for government by providing online classes and materials.
To recapitulate, I strongly believe spending governmental resources on Internet access is more essential than improving public transportation. There is because of Internet is an inevitable part of all society’s groups and because increase their awareness about environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'issue'
Suggestion: issue
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, frankly, if, moreover, so, while, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57430730479 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23731581613 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488664987406 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6700674632 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.473684211 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225745313899 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800050634498 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759591029645 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151381733836 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054068686435 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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