Arts and sports have had an undeniable impact on most of society trough decades. The debate on whether governments should spend money in arts or sports has been generating a wide range of views. Nowadays, many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration to examine the constructive and destructive facets of this issue. Some people posit investing money in support of athletics. On the other hand, some others take the other side and disagree. I am on board with the former group's idea. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate cogently on my points of view.
To begin with, the first exquisite point which should be mentioned here is that sports especially the ones which are involved in Olympic games are of the paramount importance for each country. This is because it affects the image of country and will cause thriving in economy and people all around the world will notice and get interested in your country if your country has professional athletes.
The other reason why I am supporting this view is fact that by supporting and investing money in sports and athletes, young people will work harder to be professional and earn better result. This will eventually pay back the money which was invested because in today's world athletes earn a lot of money both for themselves and country.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that I believe major related to arts cannot be as noticeable and effective as Olympic games are. Many people look for this important event and wait to see this games begin. But, there is no such events related to arts. Therefore, investing money in support of athletics in spite of arts seems more logic.
To wrap up, taking all aforementioned reasons, it could be authentically concluded that from my vantage point government should focus and spend more money on support of athletes than investing on majors that concern arts.
- TPO45 In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better to able to make decision about their own lives 76
- tpo38 the extinction of several species at the end of Triassic period 70
- TPO48 Independent Writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 66
- TPO54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 43
- Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, then, therefore, in spite of, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97213622291 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61991953619 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560371517028 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3207214543 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.066666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193015696594 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687360393118 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676365074533 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110353084172 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492173391506 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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