If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
These days it is becoming more and more important for my friends to reduce the cost of their living since their budget is limited and hey only can spend money on important issue. Some of my friends prefer to reduce expenses by cooking at home and purchasing cheap food or some of them prefer not to buy new technological devices. However, I am of the opinion that acquiring a roommate to share a room is the best way to reduce expenses for the following reasons.
To begin with, a roommate can help my friend to share the expenses since most of the time we rent a house, the house has so many costs like bill, furniture and so on. For example, when I was junior student I decided to rent a private room in order to have more privacy. But the cost of the private room was really high and have to reduce some other costs like eating out or cinema. I remember that year was really a disaster. In contrast, the following year I found two roommate which later become my friends. This decision helps me to save up some money because we share the cost. Besides that one of my roommate worked in a company and later help me to find a job which is capable to my talent. The job helps me to earn some money besides studying. As this example clarify finding a roommate note only helps me to share costs, but also serve me broaden my view and find new opportunity for my professional life.
Secondly, a roommate can help my friend to have new technological devices. I mean my friend and his or her roommate can some time buy a new devices and use it together. For instance, few years ago I did not have a laptop but I always complete my projects with the help of my roommate’s laptop and during those years I save up some money and later bought the latest laptop. Besids that my roommate and I have a same major. Therefore, we have the chance to share our textbook. For instance, one semester he bought the textbooks and the next semester I bought them. As this example, illustrate, a roommate can help us to have the latest technological devices or textbook without paying much.
In sum, sharing a room with a roommate have some benefit as I mentioned. Besides that a roommate have some other benefit like we can designate different tasks for each one for instance someone can do the cooking and the other can do the cleaning. In this way every one take benefit.
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Essay evaluation report
and hey only can spend money on important issue.
and they only can spend money on important issues.
when I was junior student
when I was a junior student
I found two roommate which later become my friends
I found two roommates who later become my friends
find new opportunity for my professional life.
find a new opportunity for my professional life.
As this example, illustrate, a roommate can help us
As this example illustrates a roommate can help us
sharing a room with a roommate have some benefit
sharing a room with a roommate has some benefit
a roommate have some other benefit
a roommate has some other benefits
every one take benefit.
every one takes benefit.
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2 //Read a good grammar book.
2. No. of Words: 437 while No. of Different Words: 188 //means it has a lot of duplicated words
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 1876 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.293 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.329 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.864 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.177 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.208 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 470, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'roommate' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'roommates'.
Suggestion: roommates
...ontrast, the following year I found two roommate which later become my friends. This dec...
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Line 2, column 644, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
... roommate worked in a company and later help me to find a job which is capable to my talent. Th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i mean, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40503432494 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45585417457 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439359267735 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8290152192 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8636363636 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13636363636 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210798992946 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689212825447 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573239368166 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145551396242 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623421503285 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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