Imagine you could improve the town where you live by changing one important thing about it. Which of the following would you choose to do?
Build additional parks
Construct more libraries
Improve public transportation
Use specific details and examples in your answer.
I wish to improve my current area of living by improving the public transportation services by making them more accessible and affordable. I want to improve on this specific aspect of my city because the area covered by the bus transit is insufficient and the alternatives are too expensive. Let us discuss the same in the following paragraph.
Firstly, My residential area is surrounded by beaches, which tend to attract tourists and the public. It is also home to one of the busiest roads in Chennai and public transport services fail to cover most of the residential areas. For instance, My House is further away from the main road and the bus transit does not cover this distance. Thus, I will have to opt for private rides like auto rickshaws, which tend to be expensive.
Secondly, The bus services tend to take fewer stops in between the rides. Therefore, the passengers must walk long distances to reach their destination. My personal experience acts as a perfect illustration of this. When I travel by government bus services, I’d have to walk about 20 minutes to reach my home, Since there are no stops next to my house.
Furthermore, My city is one of the highest populated in the country with new residential areas developing every day and there are not enough transit services to cover these newly developing places. For example, My collegemate moved to a newly developing residential settlement next to my house, and she was worried about how there are no public transport services near her house.
As my concluding statement, I would like to state that I wish to improve the public transportation services of my city as the transit services currently available to the public are often insufficient and expensive. Efforts must also be taken to redirect the bus to further distances to cover more ground.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.928802589 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85877226055 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517799352751 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0755886311 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.533333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10131415252 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389601424021 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443107820203 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068742748095 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480043202852 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.928802589 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85877226055 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517799352751 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0755886311 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.533333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10131415252 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389601424021 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443107820203 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068742748095 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480043202852 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.