Imagine you could improve the town where you live by changing one important thing about it. Which of the following would you choose to do?
• Build additional parks
• Construct more libraries
• Improve public transportation
It is undeniable that if people are planning to live happy life, many things in their life need to be change. Most people think that constructing more libraries or improve puplic transportation is the most important thing to do in any town as a change to improve the quality of life. personally, I would build additional parks where I live. I strongly believe that this is a crucial thing to do for several reaons, which I am going to explain in the following essay.
To begin with, I think that parks provide a relaxing space for all community members, starting from toddlers and kids, and ending with elderly people. There are many activities that people can do in the park such as walking, playing, and even sitting to read a book. For instance, I remembered when I visited the national park in my town, I saw many people doing many things. I saw couples chatting together, an old lady watching her grandkids, and I also saw a lot of school students doing their homeworks laying on the grass there.
Furthermore, parks are a good way to improve people overall health. The existance of a park reminds people of exercising through the day, and provides an essential source for getting pure oxyge, which is very important for mental and physical health. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, I was diagnosed as a prediabetic patient. my blood glucose levels were on the boarder line. My primary doctor was very clear with me, he said that if I did not start taking care of my self, I will face a big problem with a life long dangerous disease. At the beginning, I was very sad and frustrated, but then I started to think that I have look after my body, and no one is going to take the resbonsibility of any bad thing that could happen to me. I started to go three times a week to walk in the park, and another three times a week to have my lunch there and enjoy the good weather there. After a year, I redid the test, and fortunatly, I am no longer a risk of having diabetes. In adddition to that, I feel these days that I am more optimistic and happier. In fact, the particular reason of that is the routinely visits of the park.
In conclusion, I feel that building more park is the most important thing to do in the ton where I live. it is not only because parks are a place that benefit all the community, but also they help in keeping them healthier and happier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, then, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42986425339 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5576620382 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531674208145 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7681859828 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2380952381 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223389281899 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675547356914 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879895778862 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158055068083 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105551267563 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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