Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that technology has many benefits for the community. However, it has a lot of withdraws if we are going to think about it from parents point of view. In my opinion, technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. I feel this way because children in the past used to create their own way to have fun and these days, they have many ready choices to do.
To begin with, in the past kids must think about how to fill their time. In contrast, they find a lot of creative ideas that could be converted to a fantastic projects. For example, when my siblings and I were kids, we had three months in summer as a vacation, and we had nothing to do other than playing and having fun. I remember once we made a huge castle out of napkins. Although my mother was very mad because we waste a lot of napkin's boxes, but it was an interesting thing to play with. We spent almost two weeks to build it, and another two weeks to clean it, so our idea was good enough to fill one complete month of our vacation.
Second, technology offers many choices for children, so they do not need to think about what to do or how to do it. Everything are ready for them. For instance, my nephew is three years old. He has fixed schedule every day. At the morning he goes to his kindergarden, and plays with a wooden numbers to learn how to count, after that, he takes a nap for half an hour, then he learns the alphabet by listening to a traditional song about it. When he goes back to his house, he spends his time on his I-pad. It takes at least three hours to convince him that he has to stop playing and has his meal. This routine and dependency on technology make him rely on that schedule to remember how count or what are alphabets. Yesterday, I was playing with him, so I asked him what is the letter after H, but unfortunatly, he was not able to know it. He sang the whole song to give me an answer.
In conclusion, technology makes children less creative not only because they used to think about their activities, but also it fulfills their options in a way they do not need the creativity anymore.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 365, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ay to have fun and these days, they have many ready choices to do. To begin with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, then, as to, at least, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25247524752 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35741305963 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512376237624 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8565743361 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8095238095 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196839570367 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628477942435 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956132778077 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15455322552 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792736114823 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.