Imagine that you have been given the opportunity to advise the government of a city or region area that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Imagine that you have been given the opportunity to advise the government of a city or region (area) that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region. Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for the city or region? Why?
-Providing more affordable housing
-Reducing air and water pollution
-Attracting new businesses to the city or region

If I have enough expertise to advise the government of one thing that can benefit the city or region, some people would undoubtedly suggest the government to provide more affordable housing. Others would recommend the government to reduce air and water pollution. Still others claim that attracting new businesses to the city or region is the most favorable approach. For me, I believe that attracting new businesses is the best approach. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, the government should place more emphasis on the economy, and suggesting the government attract new businesses to the city or region can boost the local economy and benefit the city. As an example, the Hsinchu City government wanted to incorporate computer technologies by createing several information-science related job opportunities. Therefore, thousands of IT companies decided to reside in Hsinchu, and these prestigious companies leaded to the increasing number of book stores, schools, movie theaters, etc. Several decades later, the whole economy of Hsinchu City skyrocketed, and Hsinchu become the third most prosperous city in Taiwan. On the other hand, four years ago, the Miaoli County government planned to provide a more affordable housing price by forcibly enacting the "Miaoli County Minimum Housing Price Decree". Nevertheless, the local economy of Miaoli County collapsed because no housing firm wanted to establish in Miaoli County. Apparently, offering more affordable prices is not a good idea.

In addition, the government should try its best to earn money, and attracting new businesses to the city or region can help it procure a significant amount of budget, which in turns benefit the whole city. For instance, several years ago, the Taipei City government established a regulation that attracted numerous electrical engineering firms to reside in Neihu District. These companies and organizations required a considerable amount of resource, including water, electricity, and so on. Therefore, each company paid approximately more than three billion dollars of tax in total every year to the Taipei City goverment. As a result, the Taipei City government procured lots of money and spent that budget on assisting these companies in producing high quiality silicons, leading to a vicious cycle. Contrarily, recommending the government to reduce air and water by investing in solar energy or windmill companies might make it waste too much money. This is because solar panels and windmills are deplorably expensive.

In conclusion, if I have enough knowledge to advise the government of one thing that can benefit a city, I would undoubtedly recommend it to attract new businesses due to the aforementioned reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
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Message: Did you mean 'procures'?
Suggestion: procures
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, third, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48226950355 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05924598006 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51536643026 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7906241676 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.95 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.15 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256982202499 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076164356703 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708936301778 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174633096038 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512619184163 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 58.1214874552 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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