Imagine that you have been given the opportunity to advise the government of a city or region (area) that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region. Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for the city or region? Why?
-Providing more affordable housing
-Reducing air and water pollution
-Attracting new businesses to the city or region
Nowadays, although our society has witnessed the unprecedented accumulation of material affluence, how to improve the life quality of the masses is still a hotly-discussed option among officials in government. Some people advocate providing more affordable housing to the poverty-stricken family, while others hold the opposite viewpoint that government should invest in reducing air and water pollution. If I were given the chance to implement a policy, I would definitely expend more money and energy on attracting new business to our city.
In the first place, appealing to more businesses in the city will generate more jobs for the citizens and thus improve people's living standards efficiently. With the mushrooming unemployment rate, the most effective way to grapple with this problem is to create more work positions for people. In this way, people are not only enabled to earn money directly, but significantly improve their well-being due to the welfare of the companies. For example, my hometown, Shandong province, allocated a large amount of money to attract new businesses when the employment rate stagnated. The government made some propaganda videos and implemented some policies that facilitate these new companies' development. Eventually, those enterprises provided more job positions to the residents. With more money, people are capable of purchasing more stuff that significantly improves their lives, and they also benefit from the thorough welfare policies of every company.
In addition, more businesses can greatly deliver benefits to the government as well. Government can receive more taxes from the new business and utilize the money to construct more infrastructures that improve people's life quality. All the money expended to attract new businesses will finally come back and this is a kind of recycling that helps the city become better. Take Shanghai as a prime example. At the beginning of the 20th century, the Shanghai government decided to attract more foreign businesses, with lots of factories and companies growing from the ground at that moment. The economy enormously increased, and the government collected more money from those enterprises. Most of the money was invested in fundamental facilities such as internet connections and highway traffic systems that benefit most of the citizens’ lives.
Admittedly, other policies also function well to some extent. Providing economical houses to the public can directly enhance the safety of people and ensure that more people are able to possess a place to live. Deducing the contamination is also conducive to people’s mental and physical health and benefits in a long term, ensure the quality of daily diet, decrease some serious illnesses such as lung cancer. Nevertheless, those policies can not be readily implemented without money and time. Making money is the prerequisite of any other policy, without which those policies can easily fail or stop disappointedly.
In a nutshell, attracting new businesses should be emphasized among all three options. New companies definitely pave the way for the development of the city and the improvement of people’s lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 680, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
...some policies that facilitate these new companies development. Eventually, those enterpri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2688.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50819672131 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99032076451 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532786885246 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 864.9 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5848130596 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160147987223 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496773818125 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305824581254 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091070077459 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412920855206 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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