Imagine that you want to improve your performance in order to get better grades (marks) at school or to get a promotion or higher pay at work. You are considering the following ways:
- Doing additional work or extra assignments beyond what is required
- Participating more actively and contributing your own ideas more frequently in group discussions.
Which ONE of these two actions do you think would be more helpful for improving your performance? Why?
Studying and working are two core phases of a person’s life. And I believe that doing extra work can improve academic achievement and bring more career rewards.
First, doing more assignments than required can help students get good grades. The most common form of them consists of exercise questions. And doing more of these offers students better opportunities to identify the difficulties they have in solving such questions. And they can then either refer to textbooks for solutions or ask their teachers to explain what they have problems with, thus improving their ability to solve similar questions correctly. Furthermore, when they have done a considerable amount of exercise questions, they will be able to figure out general rules about how to solve them, ultimately increasing their efficiency at working out exam questions. And when students have mastered accuracy and speed, they will be able to solve more questions correctly during major exams, eventually improving their grades.
Second, doing additional work benefits people’s career prospects. Typically, the more work people do, the higher output they can produce, generating more income for their business. When business directors realize this increase in income, they are likely to notice those valuable employees who have done extra work to help boost their revenue. If they wish to continue having this additional revenue in the future by keeping such employees around, they will ensure so by promoting them or offering them higher compensation. Even if directors sometimes fail to acknowledge the contributions such employees made and have done nothing in return, they can change to better-paying jobs with potentially higher positions by demonstrating the value they can create for prospective business owners. Either way, working more offers people more occupational benefits.
To conclude, doing more work can help students achieve higher grades and aid employees with their career development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55115511551 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74295351101 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57095709571 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7320526759 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.133333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160109316414 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684469785454 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406579730225 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1155295917 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194918750498 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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