Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 3: Agree or disagree: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.

Friendship is one of the most important part of our life. Having good friends around brings more pleasure to our life. While some believe it is more important to make new friends and have fun all the time, others think keeping old friends is more advantagous. I think keeping old friends is more important and my reasons go as follows.
First of all, old friends have past history together. Their friendship is based on mutual interest. Thus, this makes it easier to know their personality and their behavior. They can get along easier. In other words, due to having more time to evaluate each other in different situation they have better underestanding . Therefore, they would have fewer misunderstandings and struggles . For example, when I spend my time with my old friends which I know them very well and we have lots of memory together, we have fantastic moments. We laugh at our past unluckiness and have fewer conflicts .Thus, we enjoy our time more because we know about our sentivisities and thresholds and try not to cross the line. In fact, during time we past through our conflicts and reach to the point that noting is more important than our friendship and the intimacy between us. So, With fewer arguments , we would have more fun and pleasure every time. Therefore, although making new friends help us to have more experience and access to verity of opinions , it can destroy our joy by conflicts and arguments due not knowing each other well. As a result, being with old friends is more predictable and desirable.

Moreover, due to having more time for evaluation, old friends are more trustworthy and reliable. In fact, old friends usually are better fit for having honest relationship. In other words, time is a good way of assessing the reliability of people. Most people show their real personality and charactristic during time when first impression fades away and reality reveals. For instance, when I have serious problem in my work or life ,I can only confide in my old friend who is honest and loyal and I feel safe to tell her my secrets. But this never occur with my new friends which I do not know them for a long time and can not trust them. Thanks to technology advancement, eventhough some of my old friends are far from me and there is long distance between us , we can chat and talk together. They always have time for me and listen to my words carefully and patiently. This experiences show that we can tell our secret only to our old friends who showed us their reliablity and honesty during time.

In addition, old friends are more helpful and can give better advice. In other words, old friends know more about our weaknesses and strengths. So, their suggestions are based on longlasting friendship and are more realistic. For example, in time of need my old friends are always my good and reliable consultants and I can get their advice and help even from far distance. They showed their behaviour during time and I can count on their support in any situation. Till now, I have received best support from my old friends’ side.They are for me like a precious gem. In time of my family disaster they were beside me and physically and emutionay helped me to stand up and move on. On the other hand, new friends do not know me very well and I can not count on their help and support in difficult and complicated situations. I am not comfortable to get help from them . Also, because they know me for a short time and may not give practical or even convenient advice. These experiences clearly illustrate that we can have more support and help from our old friends.
In conclusion, eventhough making new friends brings more excitement and new experience to our life, keeping old friends are more important. Not only they are more reliable but are also more helpful . No need to be said that most people feel intimate and safe when they are around their old close friends.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 46.0 13.8261648746 333% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 96.0 43.0788530466 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3231.0 1977.66487455 163% => OK
No of words: 686.0 407.700716846 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70991253644 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.11777311996 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60197849293 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.399416909621 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 987.3 618.680645161 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 20.6003584229 189% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4818677746 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8461538462 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5897435897 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4358974359 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 35.0 11.8709677419 295% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216801920615 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750818849309 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079114898246 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188249000369 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866432650726 0.0645574589148 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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