Life if full of challenges and younge adults have to come up with these challenges inevitably.While some people believe it is better for young adults to live with their parents for some time to save some money and be more prepared others against it. I personaly think starting the new life start with independency from parents and the sooner the better. My reasons for this opinion go as follows.
First of all, as long as young adult live with their parents they have less freedom. In other words, every house is ruled differently and usually by the responsible people like parent. Therefore, kids as long as they live with their parents have to obey their parents rule. So,the first step for having freedom to choose their own life is to live independently and seprately. For example, I had fewer choices when I was living with my parents and every decision that I made at that time was based on their rules. Therefore, I never had the freedom to eat something differently or party for myself. I was not in charge of buying things and even some small task like cooking or paying bills. This made me less realistic about my future life and also I felt less freedom . When I moved out my challenges for life started and my friends who commence their life earlier were ahead of me. In other words, they were more experienced and more self-conscious.
Moreover, the maturity for young adults comes with responsibility and having the power to change their life for their own benefit and desire. In fact, nobody grows without experiencing any difficulties in their life. For instance, embracing the life fully with all its challenges, lead to develope people. I grew more when I took steps for my own life and taking responsibility from the first pace, improved my choices during time.Thus, independency from parents encounters people to this chalanges and development. In contrast, being bubble wrapped and inexperienced due to living with parents influences the choices in the future. They go to the heart of problems without any experience in older age which sometimes makes huge inconvenience and risks.
In conclusion, although staying with parents for some time for young adults can save some money for them and help them to start with less pressure it has drawbacks. Young adults with indepency and responsibility are more successful and have more freedom to choose their own life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, first of all, in other words, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89382716049 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67943166075 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493827160494 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4804837986 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.380952381 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341785309366 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111461069477 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911439218126 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26520450757 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675409716764 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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