Some young adults wants independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specifics reasons and examples to support your opinion.
In modern life, everybody busy with their work and their problem. There is a fact that finding a job is more and more difficult. Managers have a lot of demands with people who they will hire. Young people who just graduated university or secondary school are often do not keep up with their requests. And what are reasons? Let I talk about a controversy problem now. It is argued that young adults should independent from their parents as soon as possible or live with their families as long as they could. In my opinion, I believe that living independence is better for young adults, especially for their future mission.
Young people who lives far from their parents must do everything alone. They would have change to learn all skills which help them could survive in life nowadays. First, let talk about housework such as washing clothes, cleaning the floor, they seem easy. However, it is the fact that people would not know how to do that housework unless they live alone. Living alone help people take a lot of experiments. They would have habit that they must do everything by themselves, not be received supporting from anybody. What's more? Living alone teaches people how to arrange their time suitable. They must do those work today but one day is twenty-four hours. They could learn to do all work in time they have naturally. In general, young adults could have ability of independence and of course, it is must-have skill when they want to do their dreamed job in the future.
Additionally, social more and more develope, there are many issues to argued. One issue that is argued most is about insensitivity. People do not love others gradually. In many family, parents and their children could not find the same views. Fighting often occur and parents feel like they could not understand their children. When young people live far from their parents, it is also opportunities for each people understand more about value of family. When living alone, children could know how their parents is hard. Therefore, they would love their parents more and more.
In conclusion, from my perspective, I claim that early independence from parents is a good idea. It not only helps young people have more skills but also is change for people in family more understanding each other. There is viewpoint that when young people live far from their parents early, they would be attracted by bad habits from society. Nevertheless, I believe those bad habits are just challenges which every adult must undergo.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: What's
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun family seems to be countable; consider using: 'many families'.
Suggestion: many families
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, in general, of course, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88290398126 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46574745087 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461358313817 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.038305898 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.5 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2333333333 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302386570877 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893137877924 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837015425435 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221752914683 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711064123835 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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