Life if full of challenges and younge adults have to come up with this challenges inevitably.While some people believe it is better for young adults to live with their parents for some time to save some money and be more prepared others against it. I personaly think starting the new life commence with independency from parents at the sooner the better. My reasons for this opinion go as follows.
First of all, as long as young adult live with their parents they have less freedom. In other words, every house is ruled differently and usually by the responsible people like parent. Therefore, kids as long as they live with their parents have obey their parents rule. So,the first step for having freedom to choose their own life is to live independently and seprately. For example, I had less choices when I was living with my parents and every decision that I made at that time was based on their house rule. I never had the freedom to watch some movie or party for myself. Because of my parents rule I felt less freedom at that time.
Moreover, the maturity for young adults comes with responsibility and having the power to change their life for their own benefit and desire. In fact, nobody grows without experiencing any difficulties in their life. For instance, embracing the life with all its challenges develope people. I grew more when I took steps for my own life and taking responsibility from the first pace improved my choices during time.Thus, independency from parents encounters people to this chalanges and developement.
In conclusion, although staying with parents for some time for young adults can save some money for them and help them to start with less pressure it has drawbacks. Young adults with indepency and responsibility are more successful and have more freedom for their own life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... and younge adults have to come up with this challenges inevitably.While some people...
^^^^
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...come up with this challenges inevitably.While some people believe it is better for yo...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 246, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'obeyed'.
Suggestion: obeyed
...ng as they live with their parents have obey their parents rule. So,the first step f...
^^^^
Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...parents have obey their parents rule. So,the first step for having freedom to choose...
^^^^
Line 2, column 392, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun choices is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ently and seprately. For example, I had less choices when I was living with my paren...
^^^^
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
...ime. Moreover, the maturity for young adults comes with responsibility and having th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...st pace improved my choices during time.Thus, independency from parents encounters p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in other words, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86774193548 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62240605696 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487096774194 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1833908477 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3125 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362056269125 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140480911267 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840938464704 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268813050914 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558724094895 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.