Celebrities play a significant role in all societies. The famous people can influence different aspects of a society including cultural, political and economic perspectives of people especially the younger one, Young people are more easily influenced by others, such as their parents, teachers, peer students and also famous entertainers and athletes, since younger people are more likely to have crush on singer, actors, and entertainers and I believe these people are their role models, therefore these people must care about what they are saying or doing. The number of controversies over this issue is overwhelming so I would explore several issues which are more conspicuous for me in the following paragraph.
The first important point to be mentioned is that, the majority of teenagers under 18 years old, have not fully developed their own opinions. Due to their innocence, they are more likely to believe in others without any suspicion. It is not hard to imagine that well-known people, such as singers and athletes, transfer their opinion to children. For instance, children can learn from the stars that they should take part in environmental preservation because actors and other famous people are the main role-model of these children so they easily copy their actions. On the other hand, older people will not be moved by the words of celebrities because they have their own strike ideas and their mind is unchangeable. It is unnecessary for them to learn how to protect our environment from the stars – they have already known.
Another interesting point which deserves some word here is that it is indisputable that technology plays a pivotal role in the guidance of people, younger ones are more connected with the communication technology such as Twitter, Instagram and YouTube and other kinds of social media than older one. Younger usually spend an inordinate amount their precious time to follow famous people such as actors, athletes and so on, and famous people always share their private life in the social media in order to show their self to ordinary people, due to this fact the children constantly connect with celebrity’s life which increase the chance to be influenced by their actions.
Due to the aforementioned discussion explored in the previous statements, I believe that children unwittingly and inadvertently influenced by these people than the older one, they have both a negative and positive impact on children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es of people especially the younger one, Young people are more easily influenced ...
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...us for me in the following paragraph. The first important point to be mentioned i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22474747475 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82146883902 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525252525253 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 126.804201648 48.9658058833 259% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 172.416666667 100.406767564 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25118123649 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08594011386 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590345166233 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15411966967 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467698703947 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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