TOEFL T P O 43 - Integrated Writing Task

Both reading and listening are discussing how agnostids -which they were kind of marine animals- may have lived about 450 years ago. while the text provides several different theories to support agnostids' livelihood. However, the professor casts doubt on them and refused them one by one respectively.
Firstly, according to the reading passage, the author believes that the agnostics may have been an active predator and they were by far exceptional swimmers just like primitive arthropods. Nevertheless, the speaker contradicts the statement, he says that predators in order to catch the prey they must have strong vision to track the prey and arthropods had a well-developed eyes which helped them to track the prey easily, on the other hand, due to the fossil records the agnostids had a poor vision and they were totally blind. Thus, they were not regarded as a predator.
Secondly, the professor rejects the claim made by the author in the reading passage that agnostids might have resided on the seafloor just like primitive arthropods did, and also they took advantage of dead organisms, the professor believes that many agnostics species dwelled on multiple geographic areas because seafloor species didn't have the ability to react fastly and go far distance and they remained in localized areas.
Finally, the author of the reading passage believes that many modern-day arthropods regarded as parasites. However, the speaker refuses the point and he says that the population of parasites were not very large. since too many parasites would kill off the host organisms that they live in. However, in fact, the populations of many agnostids were too low.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...ls- may have lived about 450 years ago. while the text provides several different the...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ls- may have lived about 450 years ago. while the text provides several different the...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... 450 years ago. while the text provides several different theories to support agnostids livelihoo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 375, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'eye'?
Suggestion: eye
...rey and arthropods had a well-developed eyes which helped them to track the prey eas...
^^^^
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'agnostics'' or 'agnostic's'?
Suggestion: agnostics'; agnostic's
...nisms, the professor believes that many agnostics species dwelled on multiple geographic ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ographic areas because seafloor species didnt have the ability to react fastly and go...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 212, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...ation of parasites were not very large. since too many parasites would kill off the h...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 212, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ation of parasites were not very large. since too many parasites would kill off the h...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in fact, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 268.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21641791045 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6442774369 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548507462687 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 117.35606623 49.2860985944 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.090909091 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6363636364 7.06452816374 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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