It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to those of their parents, instead of choosing jobs that are completely different from their parents. Do you agree or disagree?
As everything of life like as a coin that has two different sides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping to conclusion. After all, each and every questions or topic requires careful deliberation in that there are always multiple variables to a truth. Even though some may adamantly believe that children should choose jobs that are similar to those of their parents, I strongly think such opinion lack coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, It would be more practical for kids to select occupations that are dissimilar to their mothers and fathers for the following reasons.
First and foremost, the majority of individuals would agree with the nation that opting to pursue the profession that is not similar to those one’s parents can engender a myriad of advantages. The main reason behind this rationale is that each and every person should seek out jobs that are the most apposite to their aptitudes, meaning that one parent's job may not be suitable. In addition to this by working in an unrelated field, children will have a chance to expand their social network by befriending people of various social and cultural backgrounds. To illustrate more thoroughly, My older brother Peter is working currently as an account in one of the most prestigious and respected accounting firms in New Mexico. However, when Peter gets accepted to a college, he originally planned on the following footsteps of our father, who works as a mechanical engineer. My older brother, our dad and I had always a good relationship and we frequently did many things together, such as playing sports and watching movies ever since Peter and I were young boys. Thus naturally Peter wanted to be like our dad and choose mechanical Engineering as his major when he was a freshman in his university. Peter was never a fan of physics and complicated calculations, so the time he spent in engineering was a big struggle for him. Having a hard time maintaining a good grade average, Peter decided to switch major and chose to account as he is always very organized, net and had the desire to work in business. Consequently, for a person like my older brother, getting a job similar to my dad would’ve been a terrible choice that would’ve decreased the quality of his life. All in all, we can’t and should n’t overlook the upside of opting to take a profession that is not similar to those of one’s parents.
On top of this choice, choosing this job that is similar to those of one’s mothers and fathers can result in unfavorable ramifications. In the eyes of many people present day society, an individual should separate family from work if possible as not doing so can create a lot of unnecessary conflicts and issues. Moreover, children may also feel a tremendous amount of pressure and burdens while working if their parents have jobs in a similar profession. After all, some people make eventually comparison between children and their parents and have unreasonably of high expectation if one’s parents are very successful. A great example of this would be the children of prominent athletes and celebrities. The majority of kids those have parents that are recognized and accomplished figures feel a ton of pressure and encounter difficulties due to their parent's fame. Michael Jordan, the greatest basketball player to have ever set foot on the hardwood floor, has two sons who decided to follow his footsteps and become basketball players. The fact that Jordan is their dad was both a blessing and a curse. They were fortunate enough to have the most talented and very versatile basketball player as their mentor, but the downsides were that Jordan is perfectionist, who is ruthless in competition, and that all the fans of Michael Jordan either had ridiculous expectations toward his kids or simply doubted that they would become as great as Michael Jordan. As we speak, not many people know about what Michael Jordan’s son is doing since they did not make into the NBA and most likely doing other things unrelated to basketball. The same goes to the children of celebrities like Robert Bruce, Jack Nicolson and etcetera. The aforementioned people are world stars who accomplished feats that are simply unattainable mostly individual. As a result, pursuing singing or acting would be a daunting task for their children as they know they will always be mentioned as someone’s child instead of their own identity. Long story short, it is clear as a day to me that choosing jobs that are similar to those of one ’s parents can end up being detrimental.
In summation, yea, it’s virtually impossible to provide a completely satisfying answer to an open-ended question. Although the jury may be out on this given essay topic, we can come to a mutual agreement that it may be better for children to choose jobs that are dissimilar to those of their mothers and fathers due to the reasons and details mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, while, after all, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 101.0 52.1666666667 194% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4147.0 1977.66487455 210% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 835.0 407.700716846 205% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96646706587 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.37553407148 4.48103885553 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82929157514 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 387.0 212.727598566 182% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463473053892 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1295.1 618.680645161 209% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.1144994918 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.774193548 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.935483871 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09677419355 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276255179215 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670677637309 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665017867304 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18626413975 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358169327587 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 181.0 86.8835125448 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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